Review the comments you received from people to whom you gave your first quick pitch. Have you made the changes you thought made sense? If not, do so now. In fact, rewrite your social pitch and paste it below. (Required)
And reprint and repost it, as well. Continue the process of learning the new version as you did the original. Repeat this process for your social pitch every month from now on. If you need to review this process, you can do so here.